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    dots Submission Name: An Element of Toska IIdots
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    Author: Rhythmal
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 29/50/46
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAn Element of Toska IIdots
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    A dream so old

    with reality twined

    A fantasy bold

    Deep within the cracks of your mind

    A destiny perceived

    on the wind it calls to you




    Submitted on 2011-09-21 13:34:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This haunts me because it's true.

    Wow, it's rare that a piece feels like a ghost to me - Cold, but warming with this feeling of nostalgia that's occurred to me.
    Its core is ice but the shell is on fire.

    However, I do have one complaint - It feels shy; like the words were timidly put down with hesitant favor, not impulse.
    Although it may be a good thing that you're careful, I wish there were an element of the writer him/herself.
    | Posted on 2016-05-16 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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