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    dots Submission Name: Lively mortalitydots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLively mortalitydots
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    Life is but a solitary confinement,
    Of a soul in a mortal entrapment.
    Death is but a merry incantation,
    Of that soul in celestial rejuvenation.

    Heaven is but a lustful imagination,
    For one drunk in harmonic recitation.
    Hell is but a sinister creation,
    For one sloshed in demonic retribution.

    Zombies are but lost souls,
    Who failed to find their goals.
    Angels are but reveled souls,
    Who lived and found corpus trolls.

    Rebirth is but another chance,
    To understand an immortal dance.
    Redeath is but another trance,
    To let go a blissful parlance.




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      The flow, the feel, the thoughts, the rhymes, pure poetry. The meaning in this really speaks out to me especially these lines---->

    Life is but a solitary confinement,
    Of a soul in a mortal entrapment.
    Death is but a merry incantation,
    Of that soul in celestial rejuvenation.
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    Rebirth is but another chance,
    To understand an immortal dance.
    Redeath is but another trance,
    To let go a blissful parlance.
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    You know I sometimes feel life is a solitary confinement, the ups and downs, the long journey that usually seems to go no where but to another agonizing battle. Which leads to your other line about death, I extremely agree is like an everlasting escpae from the hardships of life into another world/ life instead its eternally blissful :)

    Just some thoughts I really, really like this makes you think about life in a whole 'nother perspective.

    Fave and nicely written!

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-09-22 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your poem. Very strong and the concept is strong in a reincarnation and you have thought about life after death or life after life. The writing style here is very mature and the 4 line rhyme into 4 stanzas is well placed making alot of sense structurally. very great and thought out piece. I enjoyed reading it. my favorite two lines are,
    "Hell is but a sinister creation,
    For one sloshed in demonic retribution." i agree alot with that point of view.




    Christopher
    | Posted on 2011-09-22 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. I like this idea, I think it is original. The stucture wasn't my fav, I like a lot FEEL to a piece.

    | Posted on 2011-09-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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