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    dots Submission Name: Childdots
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    Author: WarmGun
    Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 11/12/20
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsChilddots
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    Yet you don't look or sneer
    at the hobbling man
    or the girl with the face like a stone
    you glance and adore
    the eyes of a child
    sold to the world all alone





    Submitted on 2011-09-21 17:53:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Standing in the checkout line in walmart
    today. Little girl on the cover of some
    rag-mag with huge hair like a sixties style
    bouffant with extra curl to give it a redneck
    singer look. She is a cute kid and she is being
    sold. However I do feel sorry for her. Like
    many child stars her chances of reaching
    adulthood without major scaring are slim.

    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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