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    dots Submission Name: The Thorndots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Thought I'd try something a little different with my structure. I think I may have done something similar before, though. 3,4,5,4,3. But I don't think I've ever started and ended with a haiku

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    dotsThe Thorndots

    I am a rose thorn
    Vowing to protect my love
    Always by her side

    She is the one, chosen for me
    Attached by a stem
    To the one beauty that has always
    Captivated me and my passion

    I watched her grow
    From a vibrant bud peeking with color
    To a full bloomed beauty flirting with sunlight
    That I grew with and protected the best way I knew
    But blooms can be plucked and thorns don't reach much

    And so I am a thorn on the stem of a memory
    I can't be grafted, as hard as I try
    Anyone that ever comes near me
    Is cut by the remains of my dying devotion

    I must be destined
    To forever be alone
    My home is long gone

    Submitted on 2011-09-22 13:42:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Glad you enjoyed this one; however, I feel I may have mis-portrayed some of the meaning. The thorn did not drive away the rose, but a thorn can only protect from a number of predators. How the thorn must have felt when his rose was plucked away by one. And the loneliness that would follow, for what could be with a thorn.
    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by BlazeFlamme | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmm yes...this reminded me of me at times....loving too much...overly protective, maybe doting too much...not giving enough space...being a thorn that chokes the rose rather than protecting it...."suffocating devotion which cuts her then cuts me...."destined to be alone"

    i guess we can love too much...

    i like the beginning and ending haiku in this...nice bookends.

    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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