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    dots Submission Name: Another Day, Another Timedots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 419/434/131
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Is it wrong to poke fun of notions of immortality? Or is the true crime in claiming that animals don't go to heaven?


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    dotsAnother Day, Another Timedots
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    when dog and cat and I
    go walking in the woods
    and stand where I know
    others have surely stood

    and raindrop-soft
    yellow-gold leaves fall
    and I hear the words
    the solemn poet called

    I remind myself

    Frost has died
    as will dog and cat and I
    gold will return
    another day, another time

    seasons turn
    as do leaf and flower
    but let us not forget
    the power

    of transcendence

    then paradise is not lost
    and no life has paid
    the greater cost
    except for maybe dog and cat




    Submitted on 2011-09-22 17:03:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I tried to put this one together
    but I fear I have over-analyzed.
    Therefore I shall put my conjectures
    to rest unwritten.

    Regardless of whether I understand anything
    herein written; the first thing that I flashed
    on is the similarity of sound between this
    poem and Housman's Farewell to barn and
    stack and tree. Then I tried to tie in Milton
    and Frost.
    I was getting a frost fractured mind
    as I stumbled toward paradise. I gave
    up. However It gave me something to
    do for about an hour.
    Thanks
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      i would come back as a leaf..that might be cool..but if the tree is tall i am in trouble..afraid of heights...and leaves' lives are so ephemeral..

    but to question immortality,...why not?

    we don't know for sure...there may be something after this life...we hope...

    but maybe there is nothing..maybe we just become part of the earth..and we are one and done.

    this poem has me thinking..of many things...


    it evokes thoughts from within that come from without.

    thanks

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the Frost allusion....

    "nothing gold can stay" but it will come back...

    reincarnation maybe...

    i'll be back to this...just some first impressions....

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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