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    dots Submission Name: Only A Shadow Youdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOnly A Shadow Youdots

    unfamiliar, though I am certain we have been acquainted
    certain that I have even tasted you
    certain that my eyes gaze across your face

    still, no figures, textures, NAMES come to mind


    down a dark hall your silhouettee sways
    attracting my attention
    and you project so much power
    that I am deluded sometimes, deceived on occasion, forgetful, that I am nothing in connection
    to anyone
    but my self

    yes sir I do believe in fairies,
    ning bugs
    starry faces
    that are brilliant in their caress
    a natural world that holds me dearly like an abandoned lover
    holds my regard like life to light
    ning bugs

    you are temptation
    you are lack of control
    you are lack of discipline
    and I know you not
    though thoroughly you know me
    thoroughly you whisper
    maddening my spirit
    my gaze
    my loving glances

    there is a house of cards like the ones I have heard about in reference to the many games of life
    you reside among them
    hidden in small spaces
    the shadow on the allegory of the cave
    a mask on the face of truth

    Submitted on 2011-09-23 09:32:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the dead need to eat ...


    this cutts deep
    beautiful dagger

    ----- ----- ---

    u painted
    what my eyez seek
    when iam star gazin


    this is beyond written text ....

    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      in the third stanza did you mean "ludicrous"?

    i like the split of light-ning...

    it works...i get a sense of maybe a one night stand the speaker can't forget...i might have tasted you...but it was night, it was dark...and you were more like a feeling than someone i could see inside of ...so now you are a memory of a touch...but it is such a strong memory it overwhelms me with a need to be with you again...a magnetic pull..i cannot resist you---

    i want to love you...want to be your lover...

    this is good...i like the idea in the sixth stanza...you are all the things i don't want to give into...but i will...because you are my truth...it can be masked but it is there.

    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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