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    dots Submission Name: Falling in love ... againdots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFalling in love ... againdots
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    I think I am falling in love ... again,
    But with another sweet girl,
    with tender cheeks and rosy smiles

    Am I being a fool for smiling all along,
    And falling but again in another pacific eyes,
    Drawing her to me while being drawn apart,
    With once bitten twice shattered heart.

    But hark my stupid lil heart,
    It is but feeling quite apart.

    It does not know right or wrong,
    And just wriggles all along,
    I wish this dream comes true,
    And she becomes my dream come true.




    Submitted on 2011-09-23 14:02:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this piece is so relatable and touching....it really moves me as a listener who has been in similar situations.....
    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      But hark my stupid lil heart

    I like how you use "hark" in the same line as "lil"

    It really breaks the cultural steriotypes, which I SALUTE!

    This was a very endearing piece thanks fer sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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