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    dots Submission Name: Summer of 2001dots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSummer of 2001dots
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    In the summer of 2001,
    A bright young lad met the one.
    She knew him so well by fall,
    That in winter two became one.
    Halloween and Christmas came and stayed till eternity,
    Until it stroke him that he needs to be.
    And then like a chirping birds ring,
    Came down lightning in spring.

    He then realized how stupid he was for that one,
    That bright young lad in one summer beyond 2001.
    Seasons changed and hearts exchanged,
    But never did he feel so estranged,
    Until one day out of the blue in the crowd,
    His eyes met her until it rained.
    He then took her into his arms and kissed her,
    Like in that Halloween and Christmas before that neverwinter.
    Then seasons changed but emotions remained,
    And the now one got tied by the ring that very spring.
    Needless to say that he never let go the one,
    In any other summer beyond 2001.




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      i love the picture of relational struggle in this piece; we have that butterfly feeling at first light, but all to soon we learn it does not last forever and must decide if it is worth fighting for. when we look back in the end, we can see the hard times making us stronger. beautiful portrayal of this.
    | Posted on 2011-12-18 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      Writing is such a great outlet. Your poem conveys the story of love found and lost. So sad... If I could offer one suggestion it would be to let go the pressure to rhyme. You have a story to tell and that's what matters most in my humble opinion. Thanks for sharing this.... I could relate to the feelings.

    Namaste,

    EW
    | Posted on 2011-09-28 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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