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    dots Submission Name: The Piper's Playdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Piper's Playdots
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    I paid the piper now he plays
    while the ghostly city burns today.
    I sit alone a ringside seat
    sipping on my whiskey,
    served neat.

    The dead sing along
    with grim esprit
    de corps
    It seems they still got
    what it takes to make
    the welkin ring,
    the meter roar and
    turn
    the sea to steam.

    I was long on the downward glide.
    I endured and often enjoyed the ride.
    I paid the piper and he played
    and the ghostly city burned.





    Submitted on 2011-09-24 03:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Would that be Scotch or Irish whiskey per chance? If so the piper is playing bagpipes which is quite appropriate for such an ultimate final scene. I love your use of "make the welkin ring" flavoring this with the archaic or should I say classic. Much to think about with "ghostly city" on the personal side. The muse is once again working overtime.
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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