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    dots Submission Name: Vampire's Prayer dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsVampire's Prayer dots

    The darkness surges in veins ever cold.
    The stars are melting as day takes hold.
    The crawling chaos of cursèd light
    once more lashes me into howling flight.

    If I should but survive this day’s deluge,
    by seeking solace in undead refuge.
    In this nameless state, far from blazing sun
    a state, which even death must somehow shun.

    Grant me peace at least for the time I lie.
    Then when Red-Moon is high in blackened sky
    and the grand flare of feted hunger flames
    send to me bloody prey to play my games.

    Let this night begin in blood like my first.
    Send a cringing human to slake my thirst.

    Submitted on 2011-09-24 05:31:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      And when the sun rises; to hell we retreat
    and the mortals will hear the whispers of feat
    to where we can run no longer
    grow stronger
    in the night, where we lay
    needless to say
    we roam without care
    oh lord, ignore their prayer
    | Posted on 2011-09-25 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      To whom does a vampire pray (or is that prey)? We might be surprised by the answer. Very solid write with a believable and focused character ingestion. As always, the illustration is great.
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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