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    dots Submission Name: The Brave Little Sperm Cell That Coulddots
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    Author: Pietro
    ASL Info:    30/m/cebu
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 298/175/36
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Story/Satire
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       PART TWO


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    dotsThe Brave Little Sperm Cell That Coulddots
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    Part Two

    And so, our brave little sperm cell never gave up,
    Never surrendered to what fate had put out.

    It swam and wriggled its tail past the labial minora,
    past the mayhem that was the hymen
    and into the seemingly endless
    stretch of vagina,
    never knowing whether it will survive the journey,
    or transcend to zygote-hood.

    "I think I can, I think I can, I think I can..."

    swimming and swarming tadpoles racing onward
    to Zion.
    their number dwindling and diminishing
    dying one by one as each moment passes,

    the strongest,
    the fastest,
    the smartest
    the spiritual,
    the violent and brutal,
    the beautiful,
    the evil,
    the homosexual and heterosexual
    the hermaphrodites
    the disadvantaged
    the ugly
    the peaceful and kind
    the perfect lover,
    the brilliant artist,
    the timeless musician,

    all dead.

    save one;

    "I think I can, I think I can, I think I can..."

    our brave little sperm cell,
    soldiering on.

    "I think I can, I think I c-

    Oh who am I kidding? I've made it so far and so many have perished before me" he said,
    "This is pointless! Oh so pointless, I'm weak, and I'll never get to Zion where the egg is,
    I'll never transcend to zygote-hood..."

    and so he despaired,
    he rested his wriggling tail
    ceased to swim to lay down and die,
    like the rest.

    He was so close.








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      Oh man! I was cheering all the way, thinking this could be the one. What were the odds that any of us would make it? Pause to reflect... I like things that make me think. Is it appropriate to grieve for the others? Does this same kind of race not carry on throughout life? Keeper.
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I love these two pieces...I see the whole sperm race as a kind of metaphor for life (how appropriate..). If only more of us had that never-say-die attitude..... too bad the little guy never made it....just think of the possibilities!

    great writes! so clever!!
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      .....brilliant.

    I just loved every word in this! Such an amazing perspective.

    I think every one who is alive today is a winner. We were the fastest out of a couple million sperm :)

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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