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    dots Submission Name: Thank Youdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 775
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       to my love!!!


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    dotsThank Youdots
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    Sit down for awhile, give me a few minutes of your time
    Lay your head down, if you want to you can close your eyes
    I wrote you something just a little rhyme
    I don't think there'll be a better time

    As I'm holding your hand
    With a smile on my face
    I am glad you're my man
    And I'd rather not be in any other place
    Than in your arms
    Gripping so tight
    Away from harm
    In the darkest of night
    Thank God you're on my side
    An Angel like you
    Dry my eyes
    Like you always do
    Kiss my lips so softly and true
    If I am ever lost
    My heart will lead me to you
    So for all this and than
    I want to thank you


    S.H.




    Submitted on 2011-09-24 19:18:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thank you so much
    | Posted on 2013-03-06 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      This feels like a very intimate poem. You convey the feelings well.
    | Posted on 2011-09-28 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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