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    dots Submission Name: Questdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsQuestdots
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    I ply the skies with a vision
    of the hangman haunting my eyes.
    I am guilty of crimes of passion.

    I Play fast and loose with love
    I fly with lighting.
    My wings singe on solar flares.

    But the mysteries hiding in crushed
    velvet depths are an allure
    that I must bare.
    Even if I have
    to steal a string of stars from
    the gods to adorn a damsel's
    fiery hair.

    There are quests
    that must be undertaken if
    one's goal is to pare fashion's
    remnants and expose the fruit
    that quivers there.

    So if you
    would but dress for me in
    satin and offer me wine
    to sip from silken lips?

    I shall

    shower you with the priceless
    wonders of ancient galleon
    ships.
    I long to trek across
    your mounds until I behold
    paradise.
    I intend to use my silver tongue
    to titillate your hart shaped tail.

    Such

    that it leaves you wistfully
    smiling, when I finally bid
    a fond adieu.
    But not to worry for I know where
    the most exquisite treasure
    lies. I found a secret map
    last night as I sojourned
    curvaceous valleys and
    dallied crossing fiords.

    It rests in a most holy place.
    where the only danger I
    might face?
    Is that I die from
    want of longing, were I not

    again to taste your golden
    valley’s fruit of paradise.





    Submitted on 2011-09-25 02:50:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought I'd check this one out since it's the only one with no comments. It has an old fashioned romantic appeal.

    Sounds like N has a bit of an obsession--so much so that he's willing to pay with "priceless
    wonders of ancient galleon ships." just to get what he's after.

    Seems to me there's a lot pf preamble just to get to this part, which is really the best:


    I know where
    the most exquisite treasure
    lies. I found a secret map
    last night as I sojourned
    curvaceous valleys and
    dallied crossing fiords.

    It rests in a most holy place.
    where the only danger I
    might face?
    Is that I die from
    want of longing, were I not

    again to taste your golden
    valley’s fruit of paradise.


    The two ? (question marks) are really not necessary--there's really no question being asked

    So if you
    would but dress for me in
    satin and offer me wine
    to sip from silken lips?

    AND

    It rests in a most holy place.
    where the only danger I
    might face?

    are actually both statements.

    Anyways, it's a melodic write, which I have come to expect from you, although I do find it goes on and on a bit. And I did enjoy it much more than many of your blood-spattered writes.

    ~C

    | Posted on 2011-10-13 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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