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    dots Submission Name: someone like youdots

    Author: labdulredas
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       dedicated for my uncle...god rest his soul

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    Although sometimes I feel lonely in the dark;
    I have a very deep feeling in my heart.
    I’m sure someone’s watching me up in the sky;
    Making sure I always give everything a try.
    Giving me cotton candy against the blue;
    I don’t know…maybe this someone is you.
    I wish you were still here by my side;
    Always beside me being my guide.
    I wish I could say, “I miss you”
    Or if you were here for me to kiss you.
    Cause u weren’t beside me to say goodbye.
    You left me all alone…for my eyes to cry.
    I know you didn’t mean to break my heart.
    But you did more the moment you went apart.
    Sometimes I feel you’re right beside me in the night.
    Right after all the people turn off the light.
    You give me a small candle to see you through.
    Then tell me stories, ones that I never knew.
    But then before the sunrise…u must go.
    So I watch you flying out the window.
    You leave me a kiss, a hug, and a dream.
    For me to remember you as a non-ending stream;
    As a “someone” who threw out all my fears;
    But left in my cheeks a couple of tears.
    After the sunrise, I know you as “the friend”;
    Who left, without leaving me one second, in the end.

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      ok some people saw this but didn't comment...is it that bad???it's my first time here...please??say something...i wrote this a long time ago...but tell me what i should do to improve my writing...say somethingggggggg
    | Posted on 2011-09-26 00:00:00 | by labdulredas | [ Reply to This ]

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