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    dots Submission Name: A dedication to a memorydots

    Author: xxalpal4everzxx
    ASL Info:    13/F/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 10/26/19
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsA dedication to a memorydots

    Her black aviators took over her face,
    The bleached blonde hair was just in place,
    She came into my life so open and free,
    I use to wonder why the world sent her to me,
    She met us on a swing set outgoing and wild,
    She acted like she always will just like a child.
    She took us on adventures with Peter Pan,
    She always said Johnny Depp was her man,
    We use to play mermaid and make up stories,
    She seemed to never have any worries,
    As years floated by and I got older,
    Our happy summer days got colder,
    Things got complicated and change followed along,
    The last thing I remember of her was our song,
    She moved and my heart went with her,
    I longed and longed for a heartbreak cure,
    But now she’s gone and my face is blue,
    Abbey I will forever and always love you

    Submitted on 2011-09-25 21:02:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your poem flows well and as I reader I can feel the sense of loss. Deinitely keep writing. It's a great way to sort through feelings...not to mention others can relate. Thanks for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]

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