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    dots Submission Name: MAKE THE VOICES STOP!!!dots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 319
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 392
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1935



    Description:
       So i like to think that im not bipolar or anything like that but this could contradict that idea. but really this is more me organizing my thoughts and putting the arguing ideas that live inside my head into a physical form, wouldnt really say this is poetry, just a way for me to comfort myself.


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    dotsMAKE THE VOICES STOP!!!dots
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    I CAN'T DO THIS!

    Yes you can

    All I do is cry and wail
    And wish I had the courage to bail

    But thatís what makes you courageous
    That you have the will and strength to push through

    But I don't even know if I want this
    All it causes is stress and distress

    That's not true
    Every day you learn something new

    But what if I fail

    So what
    What's going to happen
    You're going to move back home
    With your mother?
    And do what?
    Work?
    Is that really so bad?
    But you're not going to fail
    Or even falter

    But people will laugh and judge
    Say I knew she couldn't do it
    She tries to be so smart
    Trying to get a head start
    But she's no better than the rest of us

    Who are you talking about??
    Who do you know that would say such cruel things?
    If anything they would sympathize with you
    And encourage you to go back and finish what you started
    The people you surround yourself by love you
    With all their heart
    And want nothing more than for you to do the best that you can
    And whoever you think would say such things
    Those opinions matter nothing
    For when you accomplish everything
    You can laugh in their faces
    Now get off your pitty stand
    Pick you self up
    Dust off the tear
    Wipe off the dirt and your negative pessimistic idea
    And get to work
    Put aside all your bad thoughts and
    Continue where you left off
    Because sitting here arguing and pulling yourself
    Into a dark hole
    Of ominous ideas
    Is going to get you nowhere
    And you have grand things to accomplish
    So go forth and be great




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      hey and hi good write words to live by if it doesnt kill you it will only make you stronger and sometimes we have to fail to succeed
    the voices could be your conscience trying to guide tou or lead you astray

    sandman
    | Posted on 2011-10-03 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I really really liked this, there was a bit of spelling error's that could be fixed just to make it smoother, but all in all I think this is such a hard/ yet interesting place to be.
    I think everyone feels this when starting new things, steping out on a new path for the first time.
    I like how you resolved it, and that the light won over the dark thoughts.
    It's true, hard work pays off, and sitting around worrying about "what might happen" does nothing but waste time, heck, you could have tried and failed and already been on a new path in the time it took to worry and be afraid!! :):)

    ~ Go forth and be great ~
    | Posted on 2011-09-27 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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