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    dots Submission Name: Felt with Weightdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFelt with Weightdots

    the moon spoke frankly through the first reflection of the month and favored the light as he went down and drowned his face in his one sided perspective

    a quick call said ground and sturdy wood
    foundations of
    stocky bridged lovers
    oh how
    this earth
    be grounded
    in the midst of a sea of night and stars
    gas's of distance
    burlap sacks are hanging in the closet of my under armour
    wondering if these tools are too heavy
    my belt hangs at my hips hoping to sway as I walk
    the distance is measured by steps
    taking them one at a time
    watching each print
    even thin dust plastered to the surface of self
    mesmerized by gravity

    Submitted on 2011-09-28 11:16:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your excellent imagery appeals to me because I am visual in my own mind as when I concentrate on a room for example, it is as though I can see it. I don't find an overall theme but I have a sense of element and struggle. I like being grabbed by the gut. Thanks. - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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