Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Faceddots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 490
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 713



    Description:
       No matter how hard it is, sometimes we have to fully face our fears and feelings. Fortunately, I have an amazing therapist who helps me do this. For anyone out there who is in trouble...cutting...or desperately depressed...PLEASE find a good therapist or counselor. Don't do this work alone.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFaceddots
    -------------------------------------------


    Feelings flash flood
    Horror files unfold
    Dream-field turns minefield
    Found memories explode

    Where is the solace?
    Raw razors rewind
    Cut close to the cloth
    I fear as I find

    Frenzy fight flashbacks
    Unwind me again
    I forget who I am
    and regret where I've been

    Fancy flight feelings
    Free flow through my speech
    Foreshadow forgiveness
    If only I'd reach

    Mindful face forward
    and voice fully free
    I'm reaching through darkness
    I'm searching for me














    Submitted on 2011-09-28 23:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Good advice in the intro. I might add that such help is kind of like selecting a preacher, mechanic or any professional help you like, trust and actually does you some good. Sometimes you have to look around to find the right person if you have that sort of option and gumption available. Very important stuff we're talking.

    On the work itself, it has a very nice flow. I particularly like the closing. Few not affected realize the depths to which the darkness can take hold, and like drowning it sometimes takes friends who can recognize this to pull someone ashore and get some help.
    | Posted on 2011-09-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      when i read the description i hesitated about reading this piece..."another piece about cutting" i thought...same old same old...

    but this piece is so well worded it grabbed me from the beginning and held my attention as if there were a knife to my throat.

    and as Matt pointed out...favorite lines same as his...those two caught my eye also.

    the poet's voice fully free.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads quite well, and I love the wording.

    Favorite:

    "Dreamfield turns minefield
    found memories explode"

    Like you're finally using your potential and harvesting your talents. Just make sure not to piss off the locals :)

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-09-28 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    192728

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    The World written by jjd
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (1) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Love written by saartha
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    prison written by ShyOne
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry