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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       No matter how hard it is, sometimes we have to fully face our fears and feelings. Fortunately, I have an amazing therapist who helps me do this. For anyone out there who is in trouble...cutting...or desperately depressed...PLEASE find a good therapist or counselor. Don't do this work alone.


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    Feelings flash flood
    Horror files unfold
    Dream-field turns minefield
    Found memories explode

    Where is the solace?
    Raw razors rewind
    Cut close to the cloth
    I fear as I find

    Frenzy fight flashbacks
    Unwind me again
    I forget who I am
    and regret where I've been

    Fancy flight feelings
    Free flow through my speech
    Foreshadow forgiveness
    If only I'd reach

    Mindful face forward
    and voice fully free
    I'm reaching through darkness
    I'm searching for me














    Submitted on 2011-09-28 23:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good advice in the intro. I might add that such help is kind of like selecting a preacher, mechanic or any professional help you like, trust and actually does you some good. Sometimes you have to look around to find the right person if you have that sort of option and gumption available. Very important stuff we're talking.

    On the work itself, it has a very nice flow. I particularly like the closing. Few not affected realize the depths to which the darkness can take hold, and like drowning it sometimes takes friends who can recognize this to pull someone ashore and get some help.
    | Posted on 2011-09-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      when i read the description i hesitated about reading this piece..."another piece about cutting" i thought...same old same old...

    but this piece is so well worded it grabbed me from the beginning and held my attention as if there were a knife to my throat.

    and as Matt pointed out...favorite lines same as his...those two caught my eye also.

    the poet's voice fully free.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads quite well, and I love the wording.

    Favorite:

    "Dreamfield turns minefield
    found memories explode"

    Like you're finally using your potential and harvesting your talents. Just make sure not to piss off the locals :)

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-09-28 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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