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    dots Submission Name: Fascinationdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    had one conquering thought, rising above the tree tops, elevated above the tempature in the air
    hanging in the midst of strangers and crowds
    sneering at the idea of out of the box
    proposed to the character at bay
    window shopping for gratitude
    happily married in conjunction with the voice in your head telling you to think so and comprehend the lies you analize from body language
    two tongues
    one on the side of morning
    one lying down with the stars and the clouds and the silver moon at night
    over the hills and mountains I watch my senses creep up into my imagination tellling fascinating stories
    preprogramned to believe in things that I have read about
    there is a rule book over here, numbered one through ten, and we sit up at night and we laugh about it, while silently I am speaking the words of truth
    silently I am counting the numbers in my head
    principles and a battle between the night and the day and the way the light curves around a leaf that flies through the air, is captured by a solid mass of substance and scattered to project something I can interpret and call
    anything




    Submitted on 2011-09-29 09:19:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy day girl! I totally agree with my shadow...you have perception poetic and it is so refreshing and heartfelt!

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    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Jazmine, you captivate me with your sense of perception as you sum up in the final words call anything. May you always hold to your truth even as cares of life and woes of age take your attention. - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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