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    dots Submission Name: Crow's almsdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCrow's almsdots
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    I woke up this morning
    without needs to impress
    the crows of this world
    with shiny alms
    and beads of soul,

    there is a furnace here,
    it sleeps beneath the hills
    and craggy footpaths
    seldom frequented
    by powdered feet
    and seeking eyes.

    I willl visit there
    to find
    molten ideas
    of unfounded fears
    and convince my tomorrows
    that it's okay to prepare my way
    with embers from yesterday..

    Svw




    Submitted on 2011-09-29 17:24:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Deep thinking promoted here. I need that from time to time. The crows have had their way enough all right. The most glorious day I ever had was that day I tore up that which I'd poured great importance into and realized it mattered not in the great scheme of things, that everything is going to be just fine. Crows can be nags anyway.

    Nice variation basically going down into the "furnace" of a mountain/hills instead of to the windy top. A less traveled path to examine into the heart of things. I like that.
    | Posted on 2011-09-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      i learn from my yesterdays----

    and the older we get the less we need to impress...my tomorrows will be convinced...i will lay down the ash...find my fears unwarranted and move on...

    i really like this piece...don't like the "ok"
    want to see that spelled out "okay"---

    but aside from that little glitch...

    i like the symmetry of this.

    we don't seek understanding of ourselves enough..we need more introspection i think.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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