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    dots Submission Name: Beyond Repairdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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       Kevin and I were together for almost two years we left on what I thought was mutual terms but could I be so wrong?


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    dotsBeyond Repairdots
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    My heart is weeping
    My soul is searching
    ... This body quivers as I explore this world without you
    Your cold ruthless attitude is seared into my memory
    The words you spoke..
    "I stopped loving you weeks ago"
    As if pouring salt into this broken heart, you have so willingly given me
    I’m speechless for I never thought I’d hear such words from you
    For now I am left to dry my own tears
    You never told me you stopped loving me
    My heart now broken beyond repair
    Left from the path of your destruction...

    Nevertheless I cannot stop loving you
    Although mind knows better but my heart wants you…
    My heart longs for you…
    Or at least the normal human compassion one would expect to feel…

    Instead
    My heart, my soul, and spirit is left broken
    Due to my own foolish belief you loved me





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      these types of posts always make me sad. And I am always trying to find that silver lining in them.

    In this I can see a very passionate speaker, someone who is serious in their love, serious in their appreciation, however that is not always appreciated by those that we direct it at.

    "I stopped loving you weeks ago"
    As if pouring salt into my broken heart


    This sobering truth though as painful as you h ave described will be the thing that makes you strong, and the thing that will encourage you in the future not to place your heart at the feet of beasts. (more in principle than in literal senses)

    ty for sharing this piece look forward to more of your work.

    have a wonderful day pretty lady.
    | Posted on 2011-09-30 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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