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    dots Submission Name: Bad choicesdots

    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       Ya i have no clue im just sad because i worked hard to get something and now its slipping away from me, and i should have listend to my innervoice, but no i was fucking stupid..... comment Please...

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    dotsBad choicesdots

    How many bad choices can I make,
    The feeling of failur is hard to take,
    I want to do the right thing, go the right way,
    But it seems that today is just not my day,
    I worked hard to get what I have an its gone,
    I just cant comprehend, cant wrap my finger around what went wrong,
    Try as I may my rationalization remains hidden from my view,
    Destined to never finish and always start a new,
    Soon to drown out my sorrow,
    Cry for today and cry for tomorrow,
    No matter how many times I try to finish, off to start I return,
    My mind, my heart and my soul feels burned,
    Can you see my pain or is it hidden from sight,
    Strong as steel unbreakable till I laydown at night,
    Go from sadness to madness
    Im Sick of this Shit
    I hurt too much
    I cry too much
    And all for not
    I can't stop

    Submitted on 2011-10-01 23:12:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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