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    dots Submission Name: The Blood Godsdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsThe Blood Godsdots
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    Pandemonium in Elysium lies.
    You can hear it in the crow's caw-cries.
    The days of severed seals are bleeding true.
    The Dark Lord's demons are pouring through.
    Mayhem in metal death is in control.
    Odin's pissed and Thor is sore; so blow
    the bugle, loose the hounds to bay for war.
    Let rage flow from soul to soul. (Drown in gore.)
    For each and every star shall surely pale;
    as hammer and flail tell their gruesome tale.
    The Earth and Sky no longer call man friend.
    In death and blood we all must meet our end.

    A red glow sun leaves the valley sere and brown.
    The last weary soldier falls dying down.





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      So very much said in a few short words. It's a gift, as they are prone to say. Ultimate grief depicted in that back-room recess of our mind which tells us "this is so". But is such madness in our past or future? Confusion reigns in such realms, but the rush is intense nevertheless. And so many colorful characters! Any significance to the Crow's being capitalized?
    (I no longer fav your works since I've effectively faved "DaleP")
    | Posted on 2011-10-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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