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    dots Submission Name: Just Like Themdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 409
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    Bytes: 1469



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       And to think I actually loved a man like you! You should be an actor ... you'd make it big! Cause you had me fooled.. fooled for two years


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    dotsJust Like Themdots
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    I am endlessly searching for a way to reach you
    Where may this be?
    For I am lost and cannot find my way

    I left you a week ago
    And since you have been uncharacteristically cruel to me
    Saying awful things, intentionally breaking my already broken heart

    For this I cannot let you go
    I need to know why you are punishing me
    Are the two years of my life spent with you now going in vain for reasons I am left to wonder...?

    Every morning I hope to see a text message from you
    During each lunch hour at work I hope to see a missed call from you
    ...
    For I am endlessly searching for a way to reach you
    Where can this be?
    For I am lost and cannot find my way

    I need reasons for your recent cruelty towards me
    This is when I will forever leave you be!
    I wonder if you feel the pain I am feeling
    I am curious if you can see how callous you truly are being to me,
    Hard to believe I once was a woman you told you loved dearly

    You had me fooled
    For you are just the same as all the others
    Who have filled this life of mine full of tragedies and "misunderstandings"
    You are no better than them
    Just like you, they never did own up to their own actions
    And just like them you threw me out like yesterday’s trash once you had what you wanted




    Submitted on 2011-10-02 09:49:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I dunno. I tend not to trust myself to write when I'm like this. Sometimes it doesn't last and you're back at it in no time. I've broken up with my ex something like 10 times, it was like a physical thing, no matter what we did we ended up together again...
    | Posted on 2011-10-02 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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