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    dots Submission Name: That Fuzzy Feelingdots
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    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThat Fuzzy Feelingdots
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    My mind has that fuzzy feeling
    Not warm and fuzzy
    and not confused
    Fuzzy like I don't understand

    It's a fuzzy that runs down my neck
    Into my shoulders
    Beneath my shoulder blades
    The fuzziness turns to knots
    Knots make me even fuzzier

    What is fuzzy?
    Fuzzy is when you read the book
    And canít remember what it said
    Fuzzy is when you canít
    Get that one sentence out of your head

    Fuzzy is not remembering the sentence at all

    Fuzzy is when your thoughts are tangled
    And all your wires get crossed
    Fuzzy is trying to think two things at once

    I know I can think two things at once
    I canít think two things at once
    I can but I canít
    I canít say two things at once
    I think like I speak

    You canít think with your tongue

    Fuzzy is trying to figure out
    How you could do this to me

    Fuzzy is never knowing
    how you could do this to me

    Fuzzy is pain, anger, confusion
    My mind has that fuzzy feeling




    Submitted on 2011-10-02 19:36:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I know you were trying to use repetition of the word fuzzy to establish an informal rhythm, but I think you've overused it to such a degree that it is ineffective. I think most people can relate to feeling this way, but I think it could be stated more concisely and less redundantly.

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    | Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i get a warm fuzzy feeling from this...but not a warm fuzzy huggy feeling, more like my head is feeling fuzzy wuzzy woozy boozy and my eyes are fuzzy and my head is dizzy

    and i gave this poem a looksee


    and i liked it fuzzily.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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