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That Fuzzy Feeling

Author: smartblond
ASL Info:    18/F/IL
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97 /114 /33
Words: 192
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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That Fuzzy Feeling

My mind has that fuzzy feeling
Not warm and fuzzy
and not confused
Fuzzy like I don't understand

It's a fuzzy that runs down my neck
Into my shoulders
Beneath my shoulder blades
The fuzziness turns to knots
Knots make me even fuzzier

What is fuzzy?
Fuzzy is when you read the book
And can’t remember what it said
Fuzzy is when you can’t
Get that one sentence out of your head

Fuzzy is not remembering the sentence at all

Fuzzy is when your thoughts are tangled
And all your wires get crossed
Fuzzy is trying to think two things at once

I know I can think two things at once
I can’t think two things at once
I can but I can’t
I can’t say two things at once
I think like I speak

You can’t think with your tongue

Fuzzy is trying to figure out
How you could do this to me

Fuzzy is never knowing
how you could do this to me

Fuzzy is pain, anger, confusion
My mind has that fuzzy feeling

Submitted on 2011-10-02 19:36:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I know you were trying to use repetition of the word fuzzy to establish an informal rhythm, but I think you've overused it to such a degree that it is ineffective. I think most people can relate to feeling this way, but I think it could be stated more concisely and less redundantly.

| Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  wow i get a warm fuzzy feeling from this...but not a warm fuzzy huggy feeling, more like my head is feeling fuzzy wuzzy woozy boozy and my eyes are fuzzy and my head is dizzy

and i gave this poem a looksee

and i liked it fuzzily.

| Posted on 2011-10-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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