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    dots Submission Name: Wake Up, Owl.dots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       And then she walked away.


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    dotsWake Up, Owl.dots
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    She was
    in the honest faith
    of second chances
    and contrite smiles.

    She was
    open at the valves
    overflowing with hope
    beating to his heroine drum.

    She was
    quiet in the misgiving
    hand it over without taking
    pushing fury down further beneath the waves.

    She was
    naive in all her wrong-doing
    letting him first in shallow waters
    wading deeper into misery.

    She was.




    Submitted on 2011-10-02 21:06:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Powerfully penned! Owls are a symbol of wisdom, a 'goddess' of deep visions- (The title gave me that thought) Now for the poem.

    I strongly relate to this its seems as if this girl can't seem to do anything right and always ending up apologizing or getting a second chance reward. Though the quote comes in, "Failure is a road to Success" She may have been drowning in her misery, pain, and hurt. But she rose to the top, victorious and more wise becomes she has learned from her mistakes and sits in the present remembering her flaws and smiling at what they made her 'today' :)

    -Just thoughts-

    Beautifully written Celeste!

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-10-03 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like the power in these words...and the ending indicates several possibilities....one is that she will rise from the misery and bring him down...

    she has been pushed to far...

    and the indeterminate ending could also mean she dies at the end...pushed to it...maybe suicide....i like how you did that...

    lots of ifs in this piece...i like poetry that does this.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      hello, it's as though, you are speaking to me, in a sublime way. read my journal. (;)) It sounds like someone, that has been silenced, been taken advantaged of, or possibly lost their identity. I've let a few silence me, at different points in my life, but, there's always a lesson in it. It either, makes you die off, or, encourages you to challenge yourself, to a reflective state, to finally sort yourself out. I think the worst thing a human being can do to themselves, is to give in to others, and become a faded individual. I remember, being green, then, blossoming, then, blooming, thus, withering away, as it seemed to be my fate. It's all in our choice...
    | Posted on 2011-10-02 00:00:00 | by pioneerheart | [ Reply to This ]


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