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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Card XII: The Hanged Man
    This card is a reminder that sometimes we don't know or don't have the answers and that our experience up until the moment of truth will not help. Some times one must give up old ways of thinking, believing and doing before anything can change or improve. The hanged man card challenges the sitter to stop....review and open.


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    Death knell
    Drones backward
    Fear waves through her face
    She looks toward the sunset
    Head bent in disgrace

    The horizon is boundless
    Beyond tethered hands
    Her wounds raised in fire
    In silence she stands

    Sequence of secrets
    Secured with a threat
    Detained on a detail
    She'll never forget

    The cool morning air
    Hovers comforting ease
    Treasure these breaths
    They're the last taste of peace

    Fixed stolid and stoney
    She faces the end
    The hangman's noose
    Waiting
    For those who won't bend

    The answer's the question
    Revise and rephrase
    A shift in perspective
    Will end
    End of days

    Unhand the blindfold
    Rebuke the complaint
    In a moment of insight
    She removes the restraints

    Steps down from
    Scaffold
    Ignores the attacks
    She walks toward sunrise
    And never looks back

    Her truth is her freedom
    Her freedom her wings
    She now spans the vista
    In full voice she sings

    October 2, 2011








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      It seems she had a hard life but despite it all she determined to make the best of it and move on. I love the ending. Nicely penned :)

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-10-04 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]


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