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    dots Submission Name: Toils of Tormentdots
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    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsToils of Tormentdots
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    Life is strangled by our torment
    that tears at us inside
    our elation is decaying
    our souls are broken in two

    Denial of lust for purpose
    is burning us alive

    Our desires go unfilled
    and empty lives begin to fray
    under the pressure of our plight

    Purity is worn so thin
    there’s nowhere safe to hide

    The infinite flaw of indignity
    is killing all innocence
    from the erasure of sanctity
    which brings with it enmity
    and a dose of antipathy
    so that we can
    no longer stand the stress

    So with a sigh
    the end grows nigh
    we wilt and collapse

    Life’s restrained
    and Death is refrained no more




    Submitted on 2011-10-03 16:40:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I had a couple of days where I felt the sadness but I believe in uplifting myself and seeing in the NOW there is hope and I keep the faith.

    i liked your expression and the piece.

    Have a great day with smiles to share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-10-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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