Fill Me

Author: my shadow Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 296 /150 /48 Words: 66

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Fill Me

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I am the path you are the journey travel me I am the chair you are tired I will hold you I am the bed you need rest I will comfort you I am the vessel you are water fill me

Submitted on 2011-10-04 10:18:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I thought of God in this one, Jesus says I am the vessel. Not sure. Anyways thanks for sharing.

| Posted on 2011-10-17 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

This is well-done. I like the congruity between the stanzas. If you wanted to make it sexier, you could say something about lying on the bed. Good job, Amy

| Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]

Happy day My Shadow ~*~ This piece shows we look to another...is it us or the other... Thanks for sharINg IT smiles 2 share ;-)

| Posted on 2011-10-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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