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Fill Me

Author: my shadow
Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 296 /150 /48
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Fill Me

I am the path
you are the journey
travel me

I am the chair
you are tired
I will hold you

I am the bed
you need rest
I will comfort you

I am the vessel
you are water
fill me

Submitted on 2011-10-04 10:18:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I thought of God in this one, Jesus says I am the vessel.

Not sure.
Anyways thanks for sharing.

| Posted on 2011-10-17 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  This is well-done. I like the congruity between the stanzas. If you wanted to make it sexier, you could say something about lying on the bed.

Good job,
| Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  Happy day My Shadow ~*~

This piece shows we look to it us or the other...

Thanks for sharINg IT smiles 2 share ;-)
| Posted on 2011-10-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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