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    dots Submission Name: Fill Medots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I am the path
    you are the journey
    travel me

    I am the chair
    you are tired
    I will hold you

    I am the bed
    you need rest
    I will comfort you

    I am the vessel
    you are water
    fill me







    Submitted on 2011-10-04 10:18:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought of God in this one, Jesus says I am the vessel.

    Not sure.
    Anyways thanks for sharing.

    | Posted on 2011-10-17 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This is well-done. I like the congruity between the stanzas. If you wanted to make it sexier, you could say something about lying on the bed.

    Good job,
    Amy
    | Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day My Shadow ~*~

    This piece shows we look to another...is it us or the other...

    Thanks for sharINg IT smiles 2 share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-10-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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