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    dots Submission Name: Sex Poem For Cheatersdots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 305
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 1335
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1741



    Description:
       Ends up not the way you would think... you have to read it all the way through.... I think this shit is funny.


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    dotsSex Poem For Cheatersdots
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    I was out and about looking for a good time
    when I saw you and knew you had to be mine
    so I walked over and took a seat
    my heart raced and skipped a beat
    I asked if i could buy you a drink
    you turned and smilled and gave a wink
    I asked your name and you glanced at me
    and you replied its Destiny
    I shook your hand with a gental touch
    and said do you come here much
    playfully you twirled your hair
    so i kissed your hand without care
    wow what a gental man you replied
    and which was something i denied
    after afew drinks we were feeling good
    and you said leace we should
    back to her place was where we went
    to get to have a little more time spent
    as we entered the place you sleep
    you said shhh dont make a peep
    you took off you top
    and to the floor the rest dropped
    undressed me an kissed my lips
    as you rocked back and forth at the hips
    your hand reached for me and grabbed hold
    a move so brave and bold
    you laid on your back and grapped my face
    and shoved it in your special place
    when you let out a huge groan
    you got up and said time for you to moan
    on your knees you went
    opened your mouth untill i was spent
    went once again on your back
    and said time to attack
    I pounced on it like a trampaline
    and filled you with my cream
    covered in seat and dropping with fear
    because your husband was near
    I heard his key opening the door
    he saw us and called you a whore
    i punched him in the face
    and ran out screaming next week at my place

    -Death-




    Submitted on 2011-10-05 14:42:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting.
    I read this purely because of the title, i'm always looking for pieces on the other side of the situation. The cheated have it easy, what about the cheaters?
    But this was a funny poem, not a serious one. lol.
    The ending was cute, the whole poem had a nice flow to it. Its pretty much what does happen night after night to some poeple all over the world. Lucky them...Just kidding
    By the way, it had a few spelling errors. I'm gonna be cryptic and not point out where.

    --Daisy
    | Posted on 2011-10-05 00:00:00 | by sensetofeel | [ Reply to This ]


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