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    dots Submission Name: Hope, I hopedots
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    Author: TiaanK
    ASL Info:    37/M/Dancing in the dark
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 22/27/28
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHope, I hopedots
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    Through this cloud of uncertainty
    a ray of hope starts to show
    From this frozen lake
    a quiet stream starts to flow
    This ray, this stream, she has a name
    I do not yet know

    - TK 2011




    Submitted on 2011-10-05 14:50:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      perfect...just enough...nice imagery...

    and as of yet...she has no name.

    something frozen begins to thaw.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the image of a ray of hope showing through a cloud of uncertainty. I also love the frozen lake and quiet stream. Both images remind me of real life experiences laden with hopefilled connections. I wonder if you would consider making this into a longer poem?
    | Posted on 2011-10-05 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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