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    dots Submission Name: My angel is incognito dots
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    Author: xxalpal4everzxx
    ASL Info:    13/F/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 10/26/19
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMy angel is incognito dots
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    He stares at me with his bright blue eyes,
    Such comforting therapy from all these lies,
    He never interrupts or tries to know how I feel,
    The thought of him loving me is way too surreal,
    I watch him listen and he looks as an angel king,
    He melts my cold ice covered heart as if it were spring,
    When I’m finished he smiles yet his wings are all I see,
    We sit there in silence and I hear my heart beat say “love me”,
    I smile and thank him for listening to me drone on and on,
    How much I love that I can turn to him when everything goes wrong,
    He smiles and says anytime and I turn to leave my heart pounding,
    Then a quick hand touches mine and as I turn my thoughts start drowning,
    He stands there and just smiles and just says this,
    Now can you heal my heart with just one kiss?




    Submitted on 2011-10-05 18:38:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very sweet little poem. I like the end the best.
    I like that the speaker thinks she is being comforted all the way through, but finds out in the end that healing can be reciprocal. We heal each other. We give each other comfort. And even angels might need that sometimes.
    | Posted on 2011-10-06 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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