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    dots Submission Name: Simply pretendingdots
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    Author: xxalpal4everzxx
    ASL Info:    13/F/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 10/26/19
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 425
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    dotsSimply pretendingdots
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    The days of sun are ending,
    I sit here simply pretending,
    That everything is fine,
    That I love you is just a line,
    That the days we spent together,
    The things we said forever,
    That was all just a dream gone bad,
    Turns out you're all I had.




    Submitted on 2011-10-06 16:41:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the rhythm of this. Just one little thing: I think you meant to write" you're (i you are) all I had". I like this. Thanks for sharing it.
    | Posted on 2011-10-06 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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