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    dots Submission Name: Changedots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 132
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    If I were masked
    and wretched
    I feel that I could be
    one of you.
    But I am too high up
    on a peak built of
    promises and decisions,
    life is of a quality
    I could not define.
    I want to paint my
    youthful face
    with wisdom
    and guide myself to the doors
    open with confidence,
    to places where uncertainty
    is not a lifestyle
    and courage is common.
    A place for rioters
    to run free with ideals
    and handmade signs that proclaim
    true beliefs and hopes
    that have not been lost.
    I want to find myself,
    the thing I have most lost
    and most miss.
    I want to change myself
    in the way that we
    hope that our lives all can change.
    For the better.
    For the future.




    Submitted on 2011-10-06 23:40:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Amen.. I see a deep since of honestly and humility in your writing. It's hard when we get glimpse of our true selves and see our own weakness. It is a gift to be able to see this though and is the one of the first steps in change. In order to change you have to see that you need it.

    Love of Christ,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2011-10-07 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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