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    dots Submission Name: Transcendental Masturbationdots
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    Author: NoMartyr
    ASL Info:    18/M/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 33/97/91
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1039
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 701



    Description:
       This is a personal poem I wrote to and for myself. It's not anti-religious, so please don't misconstrue the meaning to be when you interpret it.


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    dotsTranscendental Masturbationdots
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    Self-destructive hedonism
    masquerades as religious vision
    Paranoid, naive and frightened
    Look at you, "Mr. Enlightened"
    Breaking down, closing in, choking up,
    Riven and worn

    Collapsed like a quantum wave
    analyzed the path I've paved
    Focused only on the pain
    digging my own grave again

    Palpitations, cold and numb
    Twitch and spasm coiled up
    I've heard the lie once or twice
    Acted unafraid to die

    Transcendental Masturbation
    took me as far as it takes one
    Subjugated,
    slowly slip between the cracks I'm firmly gripping





    Submitted on 2011-10-07 04:18:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what a title! at first i was like is that even possible? i mean, i do like to masturbate, quite often some would say, to transcend via beating off. i like to choke the chicken but not as often as before, only really when im bored and without a thing to do. there are other forms of masturbation, not just wanking off to pron in the middle of the night within the throes of insomnia. egotesticle masturbation and attention grabbing! lookit me! love that kind of masturbation too.

    anyway, i've come (giggle) to a conclusion that this piece is pretty neat. a bit of 'shock writing' thrown in, but not nearly as far gone as to what im used to or prefer. thanks for the read! have a nice day!
    | Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      Definitely not anti-religious,but your words convey disillusionment with trappings of movements, whether organized ,non-traditional or new age. That's how I read it. I like the idea and the imagery works. If I could make one suggestion, it would be to take a look at the last stanza second verse...with just a little tweaking (i find a substitute for "as far as"..) this poem could be a powerhouse. Thanks for sharing it with us!
    EW
    | Posted on 2011-10-09 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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