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    dots Submission Name: Right now a memory dots
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    Author: xxalpal4everzxx
    ASL Info:    13/F/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 10/26/19
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsRight now a memory dots
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    This moment will become a memory soon,
    This summer day at the strike of noon,
    This moment right now how Iím lost with you,
    In a month it will just fade in my memory too,
    The way you kiss me so powerful and light,
    This light in my heart will just sway over to night,
    The things you say and actions from your heart,
    This will all end as fast as it were to start.





    Submitted on 2011-10-07 15:13:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes sometimes memories are all we have to hold on to, somrtimes it is memories that we want to get rid of that haunt us, like the wonderful experiences of first love and how you cannot have that again because that was then and this is now.
    | Posted on 2011-10-09 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes love is so ephemeral that we feel it fleeting even as it is the feeling taking us over in the first place...perhaps because we become so jaded we don't expect it to last.

    reminds me of a line from Mellencamp's "Jack and Diane"

    "hold on to sixteen as long as you can/ changes come around soon make us women and men"

    all too soon we will become grown up and cynical...the first love is the best...we approach with reckless abandon.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem is a good length and you do a nice job of capturing the feelings that go along with know that something so wonderful will not last.
    The opening line works especially well as it draws the reader in.
    | Posted on 2011-10-07 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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