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    dots Submission Name: Nothingnessdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Serious
    Total Views: 616
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    Description:
       no one cares i'm so freaking seriouse... haven't spoken to my own mother in over 3 years my brother doesn't want to speak to me so we haven't in 5yrs...just want to die... i NEVER WANT TO SEE THE SUN AGAIN


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    dotsNothingnessdots
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    My world is beyond hollow
    My cries of loneliness only echo threw the emptiness
    Alive and well my family could not care less
    Their past and current actions tell me such
    Friends are over-rated and back stabbing..
    Love ... love is painful and cruel!

    If you must believe I live within this hollow world because I chose so,
    Then so be it!

    However, this is not the case
    I long for a family ... and I mean
    I want A daddy...
    I want A mommy..
    I want them to love me
    Yet, my cries consistently echo throughout my hollow life...

    I am left alone.... so alone, in darkness that only grows darker
    I need to know why... Why does no one love me?
    Not even my own parents? What have I done please tell!
    For it is slowly killing my soul, the emptiness i feel is eating away at me

    To see that cemetery I pass each and every day, envision my funeral As if there would even be one
    I cannot help but to think of the amazing relief I could feel if I would end it!!
    Right Here, Right Now!

    I mean... who would notice?...
    Certainly No One Would Care




    Submitted on 2011-10-08 08:14:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can say that i could truly relate to this as i have felt the exact same in the past...the piece carries across your emotions so strongly.. and i really enjoyed the piece itself although it must have been very painful to write. Can i add that it does get better ..it took many years for me but slowly you can and will find people to surround yourself with who do care, its just hard going finding them amongst all the riff raff you meet in life. It is sad that there are many parents who dont care and that it leaves so many struggling through life. In the end we can make our own families though and not just ones who are related..sometimes friends are our family and even more supportive and loving. Hang in there and dont give up! You are worthwhile just reading this makes that obvious too!
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      it is really sad to feel this way...to be shunned by family...that bond needs to be the strongest, no matter what...family needs to stand by us...whether we get along day to day or not...that love is strongest.

    the speaker in this looks at the graveyard and feels already dead...their lack of concern has buried me...might as well write the epitaph...

    this was hard to read...not because of the way it is written, but because of the content and the way the misery just pounds us into the ground.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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