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    dots Submission Name: Condimentdots
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    Author: SOS33
    ASL Info:    20/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 39/51/41
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I am mustard.
    Sometimes spicy
    Sometimes sweet.
    Attached at the heart
    And limbs to my
    Other half,
    When not alone.

    At first glance I appear monotone
    But with more of me
    You experience a mixture of
    My browns and oranges and yellows
    Previously believed non-existent.

    I am ketchup.
    Emotions dipped and pulled
    Out of me like fingers.
    My dark red self sometimes
    Hidden behind brighter colors
    Meant to attract.

    As a condiment
    I am always there,
    Available for your use
    As a compliment
    Or enrichment,
    But never a main dish.

    Sometimes I am prematurely
    Squeezed
    From my small plastic comforts
    Thereby forcing me into the unknown
    To which I respond as
    Nothing
    But a watery blob.




    Submitted on 2011-10-08 15:54:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree this was creative, clever and cute!

    But you know, I bet you're every bit a main dish!!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2011-10-13 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      creative use of the metaphor here.

    a poem to relish!

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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