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    dots Submission Name: CREATORdots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    it has always been this way
    that you would return to me,
    the hand that ground you to dust
    so you can grow and begin.

    See me,
    I am in everything,
    the hem of this world
    surrounding each blink,
    yet you doubt this.

    as children should
    to the valleys of creation
    and mix with my essence
    like you did in the womb.

    You are mine.


    Submitted on 2011-10-09 10:00:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well done Shaun. I see that you do understand that Creation was and is and will ever be.
    We will become One with the Creater once again as you reflect on.

    From dust to dust from dust to divine Grace immortal.

    Indeed we are His.

    You have done wel for yourself.

    | Posted on 2011-10-11 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite worthy. I particularly like the middle stanza. It appears that you have been paying attention to this life.
    | Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the line "it has always been this way". I like that it is inevitable that the creator's children must return. Like time is just a human creation and really this has all already happened--and so of course it will happen again. It feels very full of divine grace. Like the reader should kneel and make the sign of the cross while reading it. Very moving.

    | Posted on 2011-10-09 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      somehow once out of the womb, you lost my essence...

    we have lost sight of what is important...we just keep accumulating things and forget what matters...peace and love are gone...

    we need another ark i think...

    | Posted on 2011-10-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is conveyed so well. The meaning is so strong that it's..well..hard to doubt. I really like what you did with that last stanza. Return to the valley of creation. I just really liked that phrasing.

    Very cool

    | Posted on 2011-10-09 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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