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    dots Submission Name: Fallible dots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFallible dots
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    there is no whimper
    no whisper
    no sigh
    that compares with
    the silent and inconsolable
    understanding of what it is
    to be human

    and yet we breathe

    this is our triumph
    until it is our defeat




    Submitted on 2011-10-10 12:28:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah yes , inconsolably disconsolate . I can definitely relate to that in human terms . Yet even still the ecstatic euphoria of animal and the ephemeral beauty of sentience hold us together despite the impending depravities of human nature , till our final breath . A highly cohesive piece .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2011-12-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      What a simplified piece of complex contrast of truth, lol :)

    I really liked this piece it felt gently ironic to me,
    it is the tone that creates an atmosphere that really does suit your topic, I think that says a lot of your character and really makes a piece interesting and not just a bunch of random thought or just words put together in coherency. This is artwork, with point and purpose.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-10-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      and we are fallible...and we are ephemeral...life goes on with or without us...egos aside..


    we realize how lucky we are to be breathing...and how much we might value that breath...

    nice poem, Jane

    really like the contrast of the lines two lines...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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