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    dots Submission Name: Cycledots
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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 306
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    Bytes: 800



    Description:
       Tarot Card X: The Wheel
    The wheel is always turning...that's life. Sometimes, we miss opportunities as the wheel does not wait. The good news, is that it comes back around again and often offers us a second chance. The card invites the sitter to watch the cycles of nature and make plans for future opportunities.....for a second chance.


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    dotsCycledots
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    Cycle

    On starry nights
    She spins and weaves
    To cast a path
    That few will see

    Wrapped in moon light's
    Silver sheath
    She sews a sail
    Where hope will keep

    Steady hands
    In wisdom rest
    Timeless endless
    Cycles bless

    The River flows
    Infinity
    She swells and grows
    To join the sea

    Turn the wheel
    North, South West East
    She'll raise her sail
    To ride the breeze

    Mother wind runs fast
    And free
    She catches dreams
    So dreams will be

    Ride the waves
    With Nature dance
    Embrace the gift
    -A second chance

    EW
    October 9, 2011




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      This read so well and it was very comfortable. I love the near rhymes and such blended in there "East...breeze."

    Some of it kind of feels redundant...I felt as if she was readying the boat for 3 stanzas. But that's okay it's all your choice what to put down on paper. Or in this case "paper"

    Very nice, though. I liked it

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-10-11 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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