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    dots Submission Name: just a thoughtdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Just a thought


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    dotsjust a thoughtdots
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    Coherence is not my strong point
    when it comes to the thought
    of you
    in my head
    for coherence and understanding
    are limiting
    compared to the way
    you explode the balloons
    of possibility in me,
    the way you coax the colors
    to run free
    and blend into the
    canvas
    that is me...




    Submitted on 2011-10-11 06:57:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      but incoherence is much more fun than being trapped inside the balloon and floating on a straight line...better to be busted and then blend colors with someone else, letting them run together freely.


    the speaker seems to be saying, "you expand me."

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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