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    dots Submission Name: Freak Show Sam and the Fattest Woman on Earthdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 471
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFreak Show Sam and the Fattest Woman on Earthdots
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    It made him cringe when they hoisted her from her Winnebago.
    Grungy men, happily holding their hardhats, joking about how it'd
    be easier to bury the whole damned thing.

    "Just leave her in there. Dig a massive hole."

    As the winch pulled her up, things fell from the creases in her flesh
    a red pendent,
    a remote control,
    a stuffed kitty cat,
    a book of poems she had written after the rapes.

    Freak Show Sam recognized all of those things.

    He knew all about how she loved rubies the best
    (he'd given her the plastic gem when he found it on the ground after a show).
    He knew too, that for months now she'd spent her days on her back watching TV
    (she'd complained of bedsores but what could he do?).
    And he knew she couldn't have a real cat once it was impossible for her to stand,
    so he let her pick out a fuzzy white toy from eBay.
    He'd told her he gave "Gato" a good home,
    but really he'd left the creature at a rest stop in Ohio.

    Sam knew too, about the book
    and what it said about her mother
    and the gaps in her broken yellow teeth
    where the crack pipe fit.
    He knew how her mom gave her Benadryl so
    she'd "sleep right through it"
    when she let the men come in .

    He'd let her join his band of rejects, sure.
    It was even Sam's idea for her to be
    "The Fattest Woman on Earth".
    She ate so much anyway.
    She went from being, "Sword Swallowing Sally" to
    "Enormous Enid" in no time flat.

    Instead of deep throating steel
    she'd stuff down hamburgers, pizzas, fried anythings . . .
    Not for the contemptuous crowd.
    For him,
    for Freak Show.

    She'd made him some cash, it was true.
    But it was costing him more now to keep her
    than she could pull in.

    "Just pull the trigger!" she'd begged him that morning
    producing a gun from under the 20 pound layer of
    cellulite that was apparently once a breast.

    "But you're famous," he'd said.
    "They're about to put you in their books."
    She'd shaken her head,
    jowls bouncing as she blubbered.
    "All I ever wanted was to be loved," she'd cried.
    Her eyes were watery-grey. Like some polluted lake.

    That's when he'd pulled the trigger.
    He'd been right to do it.
    No one ever loved her. No one ever would.
    The men laughed when
    the winch broke and her body
    bounced and let off air as it hit the ground.
    They laughed and Sam walked away.




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      This is so sad it's just depressing . I'm afraid that's all I've got for you .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2011-12-07 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with isabella...

    intensely sad when someone reaches that point of no return....when he or she loses hope of ever being accepted as normal...when addictions are out of control.

    celebrity isn't everything...and even the most beautiful people in the world who are celebrities have torn up insides that never find contentment or normalcy...they don't have to be disfigured or obese or anything...what's in our mind can be enough to drive us to this.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      god this is sad.

    in someways it reminds me of gilbert grape. when they burned the house down. seemed a kinder thing to do.

    people can be awful. and death is final. and loving is hard, no matter how you go about it.
    these two stories are intertwined and i love how this is spoken. broken like the characters. lived in. suffered through.

    anyhoo...
    just some thoughts.





    | Posted on 2011-10-12 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      What an original piece, I enjoyed reading this, was interested through out.

    How interesting,
    :)
    | Posted on 2011-10-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I was reading up recently on sideshow people or human marvels as they were called in the old days, they used to marry the fattest woman with the thinnest man or the "living skeleton" of the show upon entering a new town to generate publicity, these people surely led stranger lives than we can ever imagine.

    Good writing here..
    | Posted on 2011-10-12 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      The subject is very interesting, was it based on fact?
    I really liked the way that you set the poem up. I could really feel it, the emotion of sorrow and also understanding for her plight is very strong with it. it's very well written. thumbs up.
    | Posted on 2011-10-11 00:00:00 | by hidden lady | [ Reply to This ]


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