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    dots Submission Name: Lunatic Fairy Taledots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsLunatic Fairy Taledots
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    Once upon a time...
    I hated everything.
    To wake up was nothing more then a burden.
    Taking a breath felt like razor blades.
    Scrapping away the last bit of sanity I held on to.
    All rationality gone.
    Mere whispers left within the inner depths of my mind.
    Dropped in places I never once thought I could find.
    Then one day,
    A door I studied for years opened.
    The halls of peace welcomed me.
    Asking me to breathe in the stars.
    Telling me to hold the sun in the palm of my hands.
    While I swallowed the sky.
    Tranquility gave me the moon for a halo,
    to shine over me during my darkest hours.
    And from this life; I no longer cower.
    I can live happily ever after...
    If I dare try.




    Submitted on 2011-10-11 21:14:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the transition in this piece, and how it is positioned in the middle. It is thoughfully structured and I think EW61 has done a good job in pointing out the cycles interacting with events. I also thought this felt a little like it had a touch of God or prayer inside it.

    Very nice.
    Quite different than I had expected.
    | Posted on 2011-10-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem for many reasons. I love the concept and I love the construction of the poem. I love the way it opens: "Once upon a time, I hated everything
    My favorit image: "Then one day,
    A door I studied for years opened.
    The halls of peace welcomed me.
    Asking me to breathe in the stars".
    The poem expresses honest feelings, recognition of cycles in life....how events can turn for the better. This poem would be my prayer for me daughter (who currently has some health issues that are holding her up for now). Thank you for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2011-10-11 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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