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    dots Submission Name: Mundane.dots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsMundane.dots
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    Mundane encapsulates(dictates) me
    an urge to feel heavy
    arms of suitcases
    unbalanced, undetermined
    with the physicality of new
    air




    Submitted on 2011-10-11 22:37:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice analogy to flying....

    the luggage, the imbalance....packed and ready for a new me....new adventures...

    staying within boundaries can certainly be mundane...boring...

    but getting outside of ourselves once in awhile...taking a trip into different...

    worth the price of the ticket.

    i really like this...it is hopeful yet at the same time almost says to me...the urge is just an urge...if only i could act upon it.

    i like short pieces that allow for us to read between the lines....less is more


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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