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    dots Submission Name: Another Dimension dots
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    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 20/78/34
    Words: 129
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    The disbelief of my own dreams has sent me down a spiral twist into another dimension.

    This place i thought would never happen has came true and became my biggest fear.

    The truth of something that scares me to hide under the things that I say.

    The fear of loosing the one "I Love" runs through my mind like a race car going around the track.

    someone help as i scream out to the world for this not to come true. stop what is happening, and have it go away.

    As there is no way to back to the real world i coop with what is happening. and just pray that this is nothing but a "DREAM"




    Submitted on 2011-10-11 23:39:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, yes, agreed... I hope it is just another dream.
    There are a few syntax issues but I am not a grammar nazi so that was just a heads up. So, do with it what you will. The rest is fine!
    | Posted on 2012-12-28 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      Someone once said to me that we know when someone is going to break our heart, and we plunge in almost hoping that it will come true to see if we can survive it. Now I do not think I have ever hoped to be broken but I think that it is true that the idea of surviving something so tragic to our hearts is worth trying for.

    So I say in response to this piece that we should embrace these thoughts, these emotions, the heartbreak.

    Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-10-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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