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    dots Submission Name: Without Juliettedots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    dotsWithout Juliettedots
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    I fell for a girl,
    But it was short lived,
    I didn't give her all I had to give.
    So many things she didn't know,
    Too many things I didn't get,
    I'm a modern day Romeo,
    Without his Juliette.

    We were worlds apart,
    From where we wanted to be,
    I broke her heart,
    She went on without me.
    I wait by my phone,
    Like he did at her window,
    I giver her all my time,
    Without any regret,
    I'm a modern day Romeo,
    Without his Juliette.

    We're like starstruck lovers,
    Who just want to be free,
    Even though we still love each other,
    And she still wants to be with me;
    We got to take time,
    To have fun and reflect,
    I'm a modern day Romeo,
    Without his Juliette.

    We'll be together again,
    Only next time we'll be stronger,
    I just hope our next encounter,
    Lasts a little longer;
    I won't drink the poison,
    Unless there's nothing left,
    Because just like Romeo,
    I can't live without Juliette.




    Submitted on 2011-10-13 16:47:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. The refrain works well and you integrate the story with a modern twist. Not to mention that the piece really tugged at my heartstrings...made me feel. Cool. Thanks for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2011-10-14 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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