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    dots Submission Name: Goodbye Leavesdots
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    Author: xxalpal4everzxx
    ASL Info:    13/F/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 10/26/19
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 488
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    dotsGoodbye Leavesdots
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    Summer days run away,
    Colors on leaves come to play,
    Smells of bonfires fill the air,
    Leaves dance around without a care,
    The birds fly away to warmer days,
    Summer gives its goodbye gaze,
    The leaves on the trees begin to depart,
    The October month is about to start.




    Submitted on 2011-10-15 18:14:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, as Jacob says a "nice ditty". Good simple classic poem like we see too few of these days. Happy too.
    | Posted on 2011-10-15 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      you start out with a really nice even rhythm and then kind of lose the cadence now and then. The change of seasons seems to be a fascinating subject for many.
    cheers~C
    | Posted on 2011-10-15 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      simple but nice..i would work on the last line to get rid of the redundant...
    "begins to start"

    but a nice ditty.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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