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    dots Submission Name: A Large View of Themdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Large View of Themdots
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    The ground below me mounts upon itself, climbing its way towards a heaven above me,


    and I climb
    begin my steps with a sigh
    and it is determination that pushes behind me
    my heels curve to fit the stubborn ground
    my body moves with the altitude

    I find many giants along the way
    -horned creatures that growl feircly and make me shudder until I am standing with them
    -face to face
    my shadow stretches out in front of me closing in the distance quickly and making them
    recoil

    I tread on





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      This reminds me so of "Where the Wild Things Are". But you don't need to sail to an island to see them. They come to you. They are always on the path to block you. They are always there to instill fear, or to make you struggle as you ascend to some higher point of understanding. I like that you face them head on. You don't need to slay them with swords. Just look into "all their yellow eyes at once," as Maurice Sendak said. Yes that's how you show them that you are the most wild thing of all.

    I like that you call them "giants". Like they seem larger than life until you bring them down to size and meet them with your eyes.

    One small crit: the title makes me think of Miley Cyrus. Maybe call it "Facing Giants". Or just leave it. It's probably just because I used to teach elementary school . . .
    | Posted on 2011-10-19 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the images! Love the concept! We need more like this. Please keep this up.
    Thanks.
    PEACE and Namaste,
    EW
    | Posted on 2011-10-18 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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