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    dots Submission Name: Midnight ridedots
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    Author: SHRINKSDR
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 476/375/39
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMidnight ridedots
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    Midnight Ride

    Flying down the highway
    Night's dark domain-
    Moonless, soulless.
    I am alone.

    My Car's High beams,
    Two torches burning
    A tunnel in the surrounding
    Black void.

    Fumbling with the
    Radio knob,
    A Cacophony,
    A chaos of noise and static,

    Then;
    Gladys and her Pips!
    My all time favorite
    “Midnight Train to Georgia”
    My raspy, out-of-Tune voice
    Tries to sing along.

    Dashed dreams,
    Fallen wounded warrior;
    Limping home.
    No matter to her!
    She rushes to his side
    No pity, just love!
    Could any man ask
    For more than this?

    Now she begins to reach
    Her powerful,
    Soulful,
    Driving crescendo
    “I Got ta Go! I Got ta Go!”
    I’m there with her!
    God! The power,
    Beauty, longing
    In that voice


    I slow down,
    Gladys keeps climbing,
    Soaring, until she
    Envelopes me

    Gladys speaks to me
    Soothingly;
    You can stumble,
    You can fall
    I will love you still!

    Gladys’ voice trails off
    As does her Pips.

    Flying down the highway
    Heading home.
    Having been touched
    I'm at peace!





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      I've been on that road at night with the radio turned up, the song's words reaching into me. Thanks for bringing back the memories. You've done an excellent job of it. - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-10-31 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      we often relate so much to songs...i do, especially all my oldies...everyone will bring up a particular person, a particular memory...

    recently i bought two cd's....Best of Bread and Carpenters' Greatest hits...

    those brought back so many memories of two different relationships for me...good and bad times..but definitely times...
    careful of possessives...

    "night's dark domain"

    "my car's high beams"

    and it should be "gladys speaks to me"


    but a good read...and many times simple is good..it is straight from the heart, no frills...just what is there.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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